Comments: Link concepts to readers

Grace, you have chosen to write about an interesting concept: our dreams and their effect on our willingness to make sacrifices in our lives. You introduce your topic by linking the idea of sacrifice to several noble professions before posing a rhetorical question to your readers which asks them to reflect on the professions and the individuals behind them. This engages your readers and encourages them to assess their existing views before you expand on them in the following paragraphs.